Writers, like myself, tell others how their pages look after they're done editing it. But, in the act of showing vs. telling, I thought I'd share a few pictures on what that looks like. Keep in mind, my editing process goes like this: I'll read a page once, just to get a feeling of what it's trying to tell (or show) me; then, on the second and third read-through, I'll make all sorts of notations on what needs to be changed. By the time I've read it through three times, I can't read any more on it there are so many notations. Here they are:
This is page 167 of Beholder's Eye before any editing--this is not the first draft, mind you, but a clean copy that I intend to attack with my pen soon afterwards.
This is page 167 after a single reading, along with a healthy slashing from my pen.
Here are two other examples, pages 165 and 166, afterwards. Note my notation along the bottom of one page where I remind myself to take a picture of the next page before I murder it.