Wednesday, June 6, 2012

Showing vs. Telling - the conclusion

A few weeks ago, I posted a blog regarding an example of showing vs. telling from my thriller novel Beholder's Eye.  What I'm about to show you here--no pun intended--is the final edit to it.  This is the opening paragraph from chapter 25:

            Paulette Sampson pulls on the leather bindings securing her wrists and ankles, praying for any sign of give.  It’s no use.  No matter how many times she tries, thinking that this time it just has to work, that if she can just twist her wrists in such a way she could slip out, she finds the bindings are just too tight.

Much better, in my opinion, because it shows how Paulette is struggling to free herself, showing the action instead of telling you what the action is.

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